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The constable is coming
to catch us kissing
and for me to hand over
what he knows, I rightfully stole,
his roses
that I planted, watered
and cut for you.

Dear Mary,
Do not let
him smell our fever.


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cars are priced at 650
900
1500 and missing the jack,
4 DR Sedan w/o
a soul, they lost the freeway
who found the renaissance?
the milk man coming in the sun going down, not
up in my memory

the bread man ran out of dinner rolls
so in anger, uneasy
you can tell me now if you see
purple or black n’ blue
on my chin


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[Generalkaos]

This piece didn't really do anything for me until the last stanza, which I thought was absolutely brilliant. The problem in poetry is always to raise the whole of the piece to the level of its best parts, and it looks like that's what you need to do here. Man, that last stanza is great.